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I think your word flow is excellent; no choppiness that I noticed. I love the imagery provided in this piece. Your use of metaphors was controlled and used in the proper places. Spring is my favorite season and you portrayed the beauty, warmth, and birth of the season beautifully. You captured every aspect of the season and the emotions that people feel during the season. I also have to agree that this poem is quite exquisite, as said in a previous comment. You never fail to amaze me when you write. Your use of language is well crafted. You never disappoint!
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roselynedwards Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you! I really appreciate your opinions, you inspire me to write more even though I doubt I'm much of a writer :)
Thank you for being an inspiration to me.
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Laur-icula Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2012
:D I am so happy to be an inspiration to you! I didn't think I had that big of an impact! I think you're a fantastic writer, by the way. You have talent.
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roselynedwards Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2012  Student Writer
:D *hugs* ahhhh Loveeee you lauren! (i'm sorry imma spazz) lolol
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Laur-icula Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2012
Hehe you're not a spazz! I really do think you're a great writer! I'm jealous of your work!
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roselynedwards Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2012  Student Writer
hahha but I ammm! :P and thank you!
gee thanks :) I was going through old poems that a wrote today and came across some that I wrote when i was like 12 and like they're soooo bad I'm embarrassed I ever wrote them ahahahah I can't believe how much practicing improves your writing :O
Do you write poetry? or short stories?
I have hard time trying to review big long stories, as it takes so much time, that I don't really have :(
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Laur-icula Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2012
I don't really write poetry, because I have a feeling I'll be bad at it. I also like making characters and plots, so stories are more of my focus. I write short stories. Some of my short ones are You Made Me Hate Myself, One O'clock, Lazy Morning. There are more I just don't remember the titles! I don't have a lot of time either which is why I can't read a lot of stories and such.
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