At Long LastThe night was young, and Will Chandler's brow was furrowed. He was fixated on adjusting his necktie in front of the bedroom mirror, and was panicking quite a bit. Tonight was his first formal date with his six-year boyfriend. Before Will was enlisted in the army, they had been in high school, and never had a chance to go on a fancy date. Then, for four years, he was overseas. Finally, at long last, the two had settled down into a small but cozy home in a wooded area. Will had wanted a home by the sea, but Peter had won it over with the argument that seaside homes were far more expensive. It was impossible to argue with that.
The first thought that came to mind was Blaine and Kurt from Fox's show Glee. They are so similar to those characters, it's scary. Well, how they were in the beginning. I like the chemistry that's displayed between Will and Peter right from the beginning, no hesitation. Your writing style is really natural, and has good flow. There are no awkward phrases or parts in the story. Your use of description was tasteful, there wasn't too much and there wasn't too little. You knew when to stop. You were really good at showing the lust between the characters. The reader could feel how much the characters wanted the love making to happen. Over all, it was beautifully written, with an interesting story line and characters. I definitely want to read more of your work!